Friday, March 26, 2010

16. In the Seventeenth Year
      Fantasy

A horn sounded - the horn from the guard tower.

Faraway voices called out, and doors slammed in distant corridors. Penelope and Violette ran to Queen Evangeline's bedroom window and drew back the blue velvet draperies.

"Soldiers!"

6 comments:

  1. oh, love this! Action, questions, dialogue and awesome tangible senses - touch and sound. I want more!

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  2. Lots going on here, and intrigues the reader with some nice concrete details. I hope it settles down and becomes a little clearer with respect to who, what, where, when, why in the next couple of paragraphs.

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  3. Love the beginning! Lots of action and excitement.

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  4. Hi

    Ooooh I like how you go straight into the action!

    Got my attention. Good luck!

    take care
    x

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  5. This one reads beautifully to me. I wouldn't change a thing. Great job! I'm intrigued.

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  6. Nice job. like others, I liked how it started with action.

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