17.Secrets in the Stable
mystery
I gave Mrs. Carter a quick thank-you and flipped my cell phone shut before I could start bawling. I'm such a dork, I thought. Of course Lexi isn't hanging at home waiting to hear from me. She started trailing after that stuck-up Shannon Simpson before I even told her I was moving, so why would things be any different now that I'm actually gone?
Loved the bawling. Wonder if there's a way to get the word could out of there. maybe just before I started bawling? anyway, just my opinion. Liked the hook.
ReplyDeleteI liked this, especially that last line. But I'm not sure about where the plot is going just yet. Hope that's address in the next few paras.
ReplyDeleteI would take of the I thought to put it in deeper POV
ReplyDeleteIt took me back to junior high...The last sentence made me want to know more.
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ReplyDeleteI like how this ended - I'd want to read more - there are a myriad of complex situations already brewing in these few lines - great stuff!
Thanks for sharing
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