Establishing your character’s voice and carrying it through your entire manuscript can be tricky… How old is your main character? Where does he/she live? What is his/her socio-economic background? Does your character use complete sentences? What about correct grammar? Does he/she have a favorite word or phrase? Yesterday, I posted about my new favorite phrase: DON’T BE A SOUR CRACKER. Would your MC say that? I’m posting a short chapter from a beginning chapter book I’m working on…
Based on this chapter, what can you tell about David (the main character)? If you have a suggestion for a better name for my mc, I’m open to suggestions…
Going in Debt
On the first day of summer vacation David asked, “Mom, can I borrow two dollars? I wanna go swimming with Tyler and I need snack money.”
“What happened to your allowance?” Mom asked.
“I took it to school yesterday. It must’ve fallen out of my pocket, cause when I got home it wasn’t there,” David said. “I promise I’ll do two dollars worth of chores when I get back from the pool.”
“Well, I guess it is the first day of summer vacation. I’ll expect you to do some chores when you get home, okay?”
“Sure, Mom, I promise I will.” David put his right hand over his heart.
David got his pool pass, a towel and two dollars and then left to meet Tyler.
The sun was bright, the sky was blue and the temperature was just perfect for swimming. David and Tyler swam and hung out at the pool all afternoon. David had a hot dog, chips and an orange soda for lunch. It was exactly two dollars. Tyler brought his lunch from home.
At 3:00 Tyler said, “I’m going to get a snack, what about you David?”
“I don’t have any money left.” David shrugged his shoulders, pulled out his empty pockets and looked at the ground.
“I’ll lend you some. I have three dollars.”
“That’s why you are my BFF. I’ll pay you back as soon as I do chores for Mom and get paid.”
Tyler got a fifty cent Kit Kat bar. David got nachos for a dollar fifty.
Tyler and David stayed at the pool until the life guards made them leave at closing time.
On the way home David said, “Let’s go swimming tomorrow, Tyler.”
“I can’t,” said Tyler. “I don’t have enough money left.”
David smiled and patted Tyler on the back., “Don’t worry, I’ll be able to pay back at least part of the money tomorrow.”
“Well, maybe I can go.”