tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8449147139519589668.post945172927061529408..comments2024-01-13T03:17:02.912-06:00Comments on S.K. Mayhew, Kid Lit Writer : Entry Number 11Sharon K. Mayhewhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07799235347319851345noreply@blogger.comBlogger11125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8449147139519589668.post-50914910139456180622011-03-27T11:40:43.336-05:002011-03-27T11:40:43.336-05:00I feel for Edmund already! Poor fella. I think the...I feel for Edmund already! Poor fella. I think the voice is great! My kids (8 & 10) would love this. Nice job.Stephhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01513890163267239343noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8449147139519589668.post-71507898303090946362011-03-25T16:08:18.033-05:002011-03-25T16:08:18.033-05:00I'm not sure the target age, but by the title ...I'm not sure the target age, but by the title I'm guessing toward the 8yo end of MG. I love the idea and the scene, I just wish I could be more in Edmund's skin to experience it first hand. It would be an even more fun way to start!Susan Kaye Quinnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07348197999397141067noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8449147139519589668.post-83552274727251126362011-03-23T22:03:29.343-05:002011-03-23T22:03:29.343-05:00Loved the title.
The voice is wonderful, but I fo...Loved the title.<br /><br />The voice is wonderful, but I found it a bit repetitive. Maybe have him do something else clumsy instead of spilling stew again.<br /><br />Otherwise it's a cute beginning.Michael Di Gesuhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17047267262428143113noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8449147139519589668.post-65264111599974243872011-03-22T20:42:01.078-05:002011-03-22T20:42:01.078-05:00Love the concept! I can imagine all the craziness ...Love the concept! I can imagine all the craziness he stumbles into. :)Janet Johnsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12688012956157161889noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8449147139519589668.post-42184098961107671792011-03-22T17:54:52.019-05:002011-03-22T17:54:52.019-05:00Awww, poor kiddo! I felt an immediate connection ...Awww, poor kiddo! I felt an immediate connection to Edmund. I'm worried about what comes next with his encounter with this royal knight...<br /><br />My only suggestion comes on the last line...I wouls say "up close" rather than "so close." <br /><br />Nice job!!!Sharon K. Mayhewhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07799235347319851345noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8449147139519589668.post-57014624635462632102011-03-22T15:15:38.984-05:002011-03-22T15:15:38.984-05:00I felt it could be tightened up a tad. Some reword...I felt it could be tightened up a tad. Some rewording/restructuring could go a long way here. <br /><br />All in all, I loved the voice; I connected to the character right away.Jeff Kinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00667419764890599092noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8449147139519589668.post-51072936240765169932011-03-22T00:17:46.238-05:002011-03-22T00:17:46.238-05:00This seems younger than some of the MG I've re...This seems younger than some of the MG I've read, but I like it. This had a good voice and it's cute.Basthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12561466241112288690noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8449147139519589668.post-75102526041693588022011-03-21T23:54:25.421-05:002011-03-21T23:54:25.421-05:00Cute. I liked this a lot.Cute. I liked this a lot.Kaylee Baldwinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12707226153627779741noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8449147139519589668.post-91721156234339126672011-03-21T20:29:45.075-05:002011-03-21T20:29:45.075-05:00Aww, I already like Edmund. Nice job.Aww, I already like Edmund. Nice job.Lori M. Leehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04858438789496971734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8449147139519589668.post-38087336026085535232011-03-21T17:49:39.083-05:002011-03-21T17:49:39.083-05:00Great voice! I'm feeling for this poor guy alr...Great voice! I'm feeling for this poor guy already :)Jemi Fraserhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02214408467456320167noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8449147139519589668.post-51689971292382082892011-03-21T14:31:42.407-05:002011-03-21T14:31:42.407-05:00Conflict and character right away. Perfect. :o) We...Conflict and character right away. Perfect. :o) Well done!Jackeehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03351019926958000627noreply@blogger.com