tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8449147139519589668.post394641598847438402..comments2024-01-13T03:17:02.912-06:00Comments on S.K. Mayhew, Kid Lit Writer : Entry 1Sharon K. Mayhewhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07799235347319851345noreply@blogger.comBlogger10125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8449147139519589668.post-1786438597144576922012-04-15T15:49:15.704-05:002012-04-15T15:49:15.704-05:00I've gotten used to reading and writing presen...I've gotten used to reading and writing present tense, so it read smoothly and very nicely to me. Intriguing! Loved the "mysterious little wind ruffling my hair" bit, as well as the ransom note reference. :)Carol Riggshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14092209912983783974noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8449147139519589668.post-80436442400564006112012-04-14T05:02:56.375-05:002012-04-14T05:02:56.375-05:00You have an interesting start to the story. I wan...You have an interesting start to the story. I want to read on. What is the picture of? What is the caption? <br /><br />Is the note folded or laying flat? You mention it sitting on an algebra book and then further down it's caught at a funny angle on a stack of books. I was a bit confused on that.<br /><br />Susanne<br /><a href="http://susannedrazic.blogspot.com/" rel="nofollow">PUTTING WORDS DOWN ON PAPER</a>Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8449147139519589668.post-31819545117024074502012-04-12T23:16:50.038-05:002012-04-12T23:16:50.038-05:00Okay. I'm late commenting and did not want to ...Okay. I'm late commenting and did not want to taint my thoughts, so I did not read any of the other feedback. <br /><br />The seventh hour of school I guess? If the paper is on the algebra book, wouldn't it be flat? So how could it be at a funny angle? And you said it was on a (algebra) book, but then you say it is on a stack of books. Plot hole, no, but it needs to be changed a bit, I think. The story sounds interesting. (I'm a mystery buff) I love the feel of it. I hope to see it in the bookstore one day. :-)Robyn Campbellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17356555082768185840noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8449147139519589668.post-25535922022793801582012-04-12T22:18:12.740-05:002012-04-12T22:18:12.740-05:00I love that you kept the message and the picture &...I love that you kept the message and the picture "hidden". It really draws you in. Nice job!MaDonnahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05584846693925103139noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8449147139519589668.post-79577445207937825632012-04-12T18:59:08.922-05:002012-04-12T18:59:08.922-05:00Interesting. I like the tone.
I'm am curious ...Interesting. I like the tone.<br /><br />I'm am curious though, you start by saying it's sitting on your algebra books, then you say it is caught at a funny angle. I'm trying to put those two together to really see how this note appears.TC Aveyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01686886257486186821noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8449147139519589668.post-9423911169924211902012-04-12T18:47:08.904-05:002012-04-12T18:47:08.904-05:00I love present tense writing, so that was an immed...I love present tense writing, so that was an immediate draw for me. Intriguing beginning!Golden Eaglehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08721520451194318436noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8449147139519589668.post-39544111072469807952012-04-12T18:26:22.000-05:002012-04-12T18:26:22.000-05:00I zipped along through this - that's very good...I zipped along through this - that's very good news! Nothing slowed me down - and I want to know what happens :)Jemi Fraserhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02214408467456320167noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8449147139519589668.post-1044312551723089992012-04-12T15:40:13.411-05:002012-04-12T15:40:13.411-05:00Very intriguing. I'm definitely curious to kno...Very intriguing. I'm definitely curious to know what the picture is. I don't see anything wrong with this first section - it draws me in and the writing is clear. <br /><br />Good job and best of luck!A.L. Sonnichsenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11358456786727534289noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8449147139519589668.post-81835756842473918342012-04-12T12:14:58.007-05:002012-04-12T12:14:58.007-05:00Yikes! You've got me hooked. What does the no...Yikes! You've got me hooked. What does the note say and what is the picture? Good job so far...:)AstridsSoapboxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12765645879431056941noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8449147139519589668.post-13634095492507818262012-04-12T10:33:25.023-05:002012-04-12T10:33:25.023-05:00This sounds really interesting....My only comment ...This sounds really interesting....My only comment would be that I have a hard time reading books in present tense, but that's just me.<br /><br />Thanks for joining in. :)Sharon K. Mayhewhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07799235347319851345noreply@blogger.com