tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8449147139519589668.post1603993803568291261..comments2024-01-13T03:17:02.912-06:00Comments on S.K. Mayhew, Kid Lit Writer : Sharon K. Mayhewhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07799235347319851345noreply@blogger.comBlogger8125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8449147139519589668.post-53073167058413713962010-03-29T19:19:03.367-05:002010-03-29T19:19:03.367-05:00Thanks everyone! I appreciate the comments. :-)Thanks everyone! I appreciate the comments. :-)Shannon O'Donnellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17299313309059235876noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8449147139519589668.post-3722877626060802542010-03-29T09:09:10.017-05:002010-03-29T09:09:10.017-05:00You've got my attention. My brothers got worm...You've got my attention. My brothers got worms and put them on my back when I was a teenager. I'd read more. I hope the problem is going to be identified soon.Sharon K. Mayhewhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07799235347319851345noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8449147139519589668.post-59461905318889103182010-03-28T23:59:16.756-05:002010-03-28T23:59:16.756-05:00I like this a lot. Good voice. I might play around...I like this a lot. Good voice. I might play around with the last line a bit, because the first phrase with "they had worm-collecting" seemed a little awkward. I might change it to: "If there was a worm-collecting competition in the Olympics, Scott was sure...." Just my humble opinion! But I like it. Good job.A.L. Sonnichsenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11358456786727534289noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8449147139519589668.post-82755110942352699452010-03-28T20:00:17.957-05:002010-03-28T20:00:17.957-05:00Oh, this is REALLY interesting for me because I re...Oh, this is REALLY interesting for me because I read the first four sentences of this book in an earlier draft, and this is WAY better than the last opening. Love it!Corey Schwartzhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03883689227283545602noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8449147139519589668.post-76794897343388961532010-03-28T16:16:23.794-05:002010-03-28T16:16:23.794-05:00Awwww
A wonderful start - I like the focus on the...Awwww<br /><br />A wonderful start - I like the focus on the worms - says so much about the character already!<br /><br />lovely.<br /><br />Good luck!<br />xOld Kittyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13185547869183611159noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8449147139519589668.post-13545960882259641852010-03-28T08:35:38.652-05:002010-03-28T08:35:38.652-05:00I like the voice and the "gold medal winner&q...I like the voice and the "gold medal winner" - definitely sounds like something a child would think. I also want to know what's going to happen to the worms.Susan Fieldshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02433408456603462774noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8449147139519589668.post-41825378451932058482010-03-26T18:00:05.936-05:002010-03-26T18:00:05.936-05:00Yeah, no hook, but I though the rhythm of the sent...Yeah, no hook, but I though the rhythm of the sentences was really strong. I could really see a child thinking/speaking like this.Bluestockinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01225973854788421827noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8449147139519589668.post-931012071895398732010-03-26T17:28:53.308-05:002010-03-26T17:28:53.308-05:00Good posing the obvious question - what's he d...Good posing the obvious question - what's he doing with the worms? May need more of a hook though, like a problem, but that's just my opinion. Perhaps the question is enough to keep a reader. I would keep reading - what's gonna happen to those poor worms?TerryLynnJohnsonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08380207155608982319noreply@blogger.com