Wednesday, March 31, 2010

METER....

(I wish I had a picture of a cake to put here...)

Meter…


If you are writing a picture book manuscript that has rhyme in it, does every stanza need to have the same meter throughout the book? Could the meter vary as long as opposite page has the same meter? I’m totally stuck!

The pans I will cover with oil and flour, (9)
Pour in the batter, bake for an hour. (9)

I’ll frost it all over and add a flower, (11)
Above my head this grand cake will tower. (11)

Any suggestions?

Tuesday, March 30, 2010

WRITING COMMUNITY INFORMATION

The Inkwell is packed with information and discussion groups for writers and illustrators. As of 7 p.m. CST we have 113 members. I thought I would share with you some of the great things you can do and learn from at the Inkwell.

Upcoming Events Page:

• Three HarperCollins editors answer your questions!

March 31, 2010 from 5pm to 6pm – The Inkpop website

• Agent's Day Newport Beach, CA May 15, 2010

May 15, 2010 from 9am to 5pm – Newport Beach ca

• UCLA Extension Online

April 2, 2012 from 6pm to 7pm – Your laptop


A Blog Page: It’s filled with great topics and wonderful links! You can post a link to your blog here. (Very cool posts you can link to…)

Becoming a Slush Pile Hero- Part Four: "Full" Disclosure

GRAFFITI WALL OPENING!! Our Own, Marcy Hatch!

Getting to know your characters

Great post from Suzette Saxton on getting to know your characters. http://tinyurl.com/ybgj3kl

Lots of forums: (Here are a few examples…)

Sourcebooks TeenFIRE, a publishing company you need to know!
I'm a member of Sourcebooks TeenFIRE and if you don't know about this YA publisher you should! Last month TeenFIRE and the fabulous Georgia…
Started by Jessica Milar

What's appropriate in middle grade novels?
I'm guessing that kids in elementary schools are reading middle grades that might have 14-year-old MCs. What's off limits?
Started by Buffy Andrews

Ask anything you like about publishing on this thread
If you're new to the site and just want some questions answered, then post them here. Hopefully you'll return and become a member!
Started by Jessica Milar

37 Discussion Groups: (Here’s a sampling…)

Introductions Please :)

Manuscript Critiques

YA Queries

Sci-Fi and Fantasy

Celebrate (Stop in and share your successes and other inkwell member’s successes.)

MG Queries (I’m the moderator of this group.)

Artists and Illustrators

YA Queries

YA First Five

Picture Book
There is even a place to CHAT with other members and to display your artwork or photographs. The Inkwell has something for everyone! I hope you will hop over and give it a shot.


FYI: Moonrat is celebrating her 500,000th hit by having a contest.  The deadline is tomorrow, so hurry over and check it out!

Monday, March 29, 2010

AND THE WINNER IS...


Thanks to everyone who entered my First Four Sentences Contest.  I hope you had fun and got some good input on your first four sentences...The first winner  out of the entries is MUSHERS DON'T SAY MUSH(My lovely daughter drew entry number 14 out of a bowl.)  The second winner is Susan Fields(I wrote everyones name down after each comment, assigned them a number and then used random.org to find the winner. There were 90 comments, excluding mine!)  I'll contact both of you via email for your addresses.

Do you have a writing goal for this week?  Do you have a query goal? 

Friday, March 26, 2010

FIRST FOUR SENTENCES CRITIQUING CONTEST...

Thank you to everyone who entered my little contest. I'll leave this post up until Monday evening, so you'll have plenty of time to comment on as many entries as you'd like. I decided to add another prize. There will be one winner from the people who entered their first four sentences. The other winner will come from the comments. Each comment you post gives you one entry. Both prize packages will be school days scrapbooking supplies.
18.The Path
     Genre: YA

Mumbling undecipherable words, Blake White sat on a weathered boulder glaring at a surfer suiting up. His teeth chattered as he looked out towards the vast open water colored sea; the crisp air chilled him to the bone, causing him to catch his breath. Living this life made it hard to even breathe some days. School just wasn’t the same as before.
17.Secrets in the Stable
     mystery

I gave Mrs. Carter a quick thank-you and flipped my cell phone shut before I could start bawling. I'm such a dork, I thought. Of course Lexi isn't hanging at home waiting to hear from me. She started trailing after that stuck-up Shannon Simpson before I even told her I was moving, so why would things be any different now that I'm actually gone?
16. In the Seventeenth Year
      Fantasy

A horn sounded - the horn from the guard tower.

Faraway voices called out, and doors slammed in distant corridors. Penelope and Violette ran to Queen Evangeline's bedroom window and drew back the blue velvet draperies.

"Soldiers!"
15.Siege of the Heart
     Historical Romance
Isobel Dumont vowed she would not cry, not in front of the men her father charged with her protection. With the telltale pressure building up behind her eyes, she focused on the boss of the circular shield slung across the back of the rider in front of her as she urged her steed down the path. Gritting her teeth, she adjusted the bow and quiver of arrows resting on her shoulder. She wanted an excuse to use them.
14.Musher's Don’t Say Mush
     Young Adult fiction

The thing about dogsled racing is things can happen pretty fast. Look down for a blink to hang the snow hook and you've missed the parked car that you need to avoid on the way to the trail. So really, it wasn't my fault the side mirror accidentally tangled with my sled and ripped off. I mean, who parks a car on the road anyway, when you know a pile of crazy dogs will be screaming past?
13.Lion Awakens
     MG

Annie rolled over and hugged her stuffed lion, which was missing a brown eye and some of its tan fur. The lion was a present for her fourth birthday and every night for the past thirteen years she had slept with it. Well, except for when she was little and stayed overnight at a friend's house. She didn't want the other girls to think she was a baby, so she left Charlotte at home.
12.One Frog
      PB

One Frog
Two frogs
Three frogs
Four
11.High Street Gang and the Locket of Doom
     MG

I'm scared. I don't mind walking through the cemetery when it's light outside, but at midnight? Walking on top of all those dead people when it's dark gives me he creeps.
10.High Street Gang and the Haunted Barn
     MG

You're insane," A.J. yelled. "If you think I'm going to sleep in a barn that's haunted you're totally out of your mind."

"I'm with A.J. on this one," Becca said, twisting her long, red ponytail around her skinny finger.

"We can't let some little itty-bitty ghost stand in our way of a free movie, can we?"
9. Brain Invaders
    Genre: MG

The man shook violently. His eyes rolled in their sockets and his body went limp and thudded to the floor. His tongue hung out of his mouth. It looked like it was growing.
8. Ella's Dance
    YA

Ella stared at the white alabaster urn the funeral director had given her. It was hard to believe that Grandma had become nothing more than a pile of white ashes. She longed to feel her grandma's thick arms around her and to smell her sweet perfume that hung in the air like an August fog. How does a cream-puff-of-a-lady become a bag of brittle bones? she wondered.
7. Killing Kessler
    Paranormal Romance

The mouse squeaked when Adam put it in the machine. Tabitha wrapped her arms around her stomach and concentrated on not puking. Sucking air past the lump in her throat hurt enough to make her forget about breathing, at least for a while. Adam pushed a button on the remote control.
6. Vultura Highway
    Crime Thriller

“Ventura Highway” started playing and Scott Haskins thought, this can’t be a coincidence, as his convertible cut through the darkness at eighty miles per hour; his mind and body in perfect harmony from the three glasses of Bushmills he treated himself to in the sanctity of his office thirty minutes ago.

The wind rolled off the windshield, aerating his hundred-dollar haircut and filling his nose with the fragrance of Eau de Southern California.

Scott summed things up in his mind, I just sealed a sweet deal and I’m flying down Ventura Highway in a hundred thousand dollar car, listening to America sing Ventura Highway. It is good to be me.

The first waft of a chemical stench assaulted his nostrils, interrupting the serenity of the moment.
5. ICE DOGS
    middle grade adventure/fiction

"I'm not taking you to another dog yard," my mom says. She thumps down her briefcase on the kitchen counter and grabs her cheese and cucumber sandwich from the fridge. Her blonde hair, highlighted to hide the grey, falls over her eyes as she stuffs a Ziploc with baby carrots. Then she stops and her tone softens with a sigh, "We can barely afford the dogs we have, Vicky."
4. A Sprinkling of Promises
    Women's Fiction

Lizzy Batron’s sandal-clad foot played with the accelerator like a teenager with a new license. Faster. She tightened her grip on the steering wheel and stomped the pedal. Lizzy catapulted past the scene of her three-year old crime as though Satan himself chased her.
3. Unexpected Miracles
    Christian Historical Romance

The grey, gloomy sky perfectly mirrored Travis' spirits as he stepped, sore and travel-weary, from the stagecoach. A mist of spring rain swirled around him, mixing with the dust on his tailored traveling suit. He frowned at the mud now clinging to his beige cuffs and stepped gingerly over a rivulet of rain water that trickled down the dirt street. He noted with distaste that he could see most of the town from where he stood.
2. TRAIN WATCH

    Middle Grade Historical

August 5, 194
Dear Mama,
PLEASE COME GET ME AND OTIS! I’m tired of working in the field picking cotton and corn and tobacco and whatever else Grandpa Lum grows for “BOSS MAN.” I thought slavery was over! I want to come live with you, Mama.
1. Scott and the Naughty Boy Factory –
    children's chapter book.

It had taken two days of digging, but Scott finally had a small cup full of worms. He only kept the best ones - long and fat and slimy. This cup of worms was his best yet. He was sure that if they had worm-collecting at the Olympics, this cup would be a gold medal winner

Wednesday, March 24, 2010

First Four Sentence of Your WIP Contest...(Deadline 1 pm CST Friday)

Do you follow the Authoress at Miss Snark’s First Victim?  She’s having a contest that runs all day today!

I thought I would follow her lead and do a First Four Sentences of Your WIP Contest. Email your: Title, Genre, and the first four sentences of your WIP…To me at skmayh(at)q. com by 1 pm CST on FRIDAY. (I just updated the deadline, as I will not be home until then, so you guys get a few more hours to enter.  You can enter more than once!!!) 

I’ll post them on Friday. Everyone who enters their first four sentences will get one entry and everyone who makes a comment on the submissions will get an entry (so you could get two entries). The prize is…a school days scrapbooking ensemble.

A side note here…Jane Yolen is one of my literary heroes…If you get a chance to hop over to her blog/site you won’t be disappointed. She’s an amazing person!

Tuesday, March 23, 2010

WHAT ARE YOU DOING FOR YOUR PLATFORM?

(This has nothing to do with my post, it's just a great picture from my trip to the Bahamas...)

So, what are you doing to build a platform?  In my interview with literary agent Mark McVeigh we learned that a platform is any media based entity you have that puts you out there for people to read or experience in some way. It could be a blog, a local radio chat, contacts you have with the media, even Twitter.

Do you have a blog?  Do you Twitter?  Do you facebook?  Do you belong to YALITCHAT?  Have you joined The Inkwell?  Have you done any school/library presentations?  Have you been on the radioWHAT ARE YOU DOING TO BUILD A PLATFORM? 

Monday, March 22, 2010

WRITING COMMUNITY ALERT...and other informational links

NEW WRITING COMMUNITY ALERT: The Inkwell is a great new writer’s community! If you haven’t joined, now is the time… Read Buffy’s review on Literary Rambles, check out the site, join, participate, increase your knowledge, get a manuscript critique and get another step closer to publication.

From The Inkwell“All new writers and artists (including illustrators, web comic creators and graphic artists) have to start somewhere, and we hope you'll begin your journey here. We want to give you the resources and support you need to be successful. This is also a community for established writers and artists, a place for them to promote their work and help others. We hope that they, too, will continue to learn and grow their skills.

Inkwell belongs to you and every other member. Its success depends on each of us participating, spreading the word and growing the site through engaging groups and interactive features. We hope that you find not only the resources you need but a caring community of writers and artists who are dedicated and passionate about their craft.”

AGENT INFORMATION: If you noticed my sidebar has grown. I spent some time looking for agent blogs for you (and me). Chuck Sambuchino’s blog is loaded with agent and publishing information. You can get his blog posts via email. Do you follow links from other people’s sidebars?

EXPERT ADVICE: What are you supposed to do after you send out your queries? "Live your life as though it were normal," says The Authoress. Check out her great post on how to handle the stress of waiting.

So, go forth, increase your knowledge, and be stress free...

Sunday, March 21, 2010

Breathe...My Life In iTunes

I borrowed this from Barry’s live journal. If you haven’t looked at my Agent Blog List lately, you’ll find I’ve done quite a bit of work on it. Hopefully, you’ll find a link that is beneficial to you.  I also just found an amazing teen age writer Steph Bowe through a series of links.  Check her out!  She's agented and holding an awesome contest...


My Life in iTunes:
RULES:
1. Put your iTunes, Windows Media Player, etc. on shuffle.
2. For each question, press the next button to get your answer.
3. YOU MUST WRITE THAT SONG NAME DOWN NO MATTER HOW SILLY IT SOUNDS.
4. Tag 15 friends (Consider yourself tagged if you read this post. Let me know in the comments so I can come read your iTunes Life.)
5. Everyone tagged has to do the same thing. (Unless you don’t want to.)
6. Have Fun!

1. IF SOMEONE SAYS 'ARE YOU OKAY' YOU SAY?
    Tell Me Why by Taylor Swift (I’d like to know why you’re asking. Do I look bad?)

2. HOW WOULD YOU DESCRIBE YOURSELF
    Take Me There by Plain White T’s (I guess this has something to do with my need to go  here…       anywhere. Then I can take notes for future scenes.)

3. WHAT DO YOU LIKE IN A GUY/GIRL?
     Be Without You by Mary J. Blige (Yep, I like to be alone. I write better that way.)

4. HOW DO YOU FEEL TODAY?
    You and Me by Plain White T’s (I’m talking about being alone with my main characters.)

5. WHAT IS YOUR LIFE'S PURPOSE?
     Life in Technicolor by Coldplay (I was thinking Life in Print would be my life purpose.)

6. WHAT'S YOUR MOTTO?
     Should’ve Been A Cowboy by Toby Keith (Yep, that’s me!)

7. WHAT DO YOUR FRIENDS THINK OF YOU?
     A Little Too Late by White Trash With Money (They must be talking about how long it takes me to reply to a phone call…Try email, I have a computer attached to my hand.)

8. WHAT DO YOUR PARENTS THINK OF YOU?
     Invisibly Shaken by Rodney Atkins (At least they haven't said anything to me.)

9. WHAT DO YOU THINK ABOUT VERY OFTEN?
    Where You Are by Rascal Flatts (I’m talking about you, because I've been wondering.)

10.WHAT DO YOU THINK OF YOUR BEST FRIEND?
      The Way I Loved You by Taylor Swift (I’m loyal to my friends, through good bad or ugly times.)

11.WHAT IS YOUR LIFE STORY?
      Rehab by Rihanna (Ummm…)

12.WHAT DO YOU WANT TO BE WHEN YOU GROW UP?
     Death And All His Friends by Coldplay (Funny…I used to tell my students my life goal was to have lots of people at my funeral.)

13.WHAT WILL THEY PLAY AT YOUR FUNERAL?
     Help Me Remember by Rascal Flatts (That must be because I really want them to play some hard rock…)

14.WHAT IS YOUR HOBBY/INTEREST?
     Cleaning This Gun by Rodney Atkins (Note my hobbies to all teenage boys who are interested in my teenage daughter.)

15.WHAT IS YOUR BIGGEST FEAR?
     Making a Memory by Plain White T’s (Often what we want the most is what we fear the most…success.)

16.WHAT IS YOUR BIGGEST SECRET?
     Wasted by Carrie Underwood (Must be talking about paper and ink in my printer.)

17.WHAT DO YOU WANT RIGHT NOW?
     Where Is The Love by Celine Dion (Love from publishers, agents, etc…?)

18.WHAT DO YOU THINK OF YOUR FRIENDS?
      I Wish It Was You by Trace Adkins (I wish my writing friends success and my other friends success of all sorts.)

19.WHAT WILL YOU POST THIS AS?
     Breathe by Taylor Swift (After all this is my LIFE in iTunes and one must Breathe.)

Does music inspire you? Do you listen to music as you write? Do you use music to unwind? I LOVE to play loud music with the windows open on a nice day. Do you?

I hope you had a great weekend and are ready to hit the paper running tomorrow.

Friday, March 12, 2010

ARE YOU A MAVEN?

My husband brought home THE TIPPING POINT by Malcolm Gladwell.  Great, I thought, another business book.  Little did I know that once I picked it up I wouldn't be able to put it down.  If you like shopping, commercials, or have any interest in marketing, you should read this book. 

Are you a market maven?  Do you feel the NEED to tell people when you find a great new product?  Do you give other people coupons?  Do you know who has what and if it's on sale?  Do you help people when you are shopping?  Are you obsessed with getting the best price and product?  Do you want to make sure that people around you get the best deal too?   You could be a MAVEN...Have you read any of Malcolm Gladwell's books?


I'll won't be  posting next week....I'll miss the fun, but hopefully will be able to catch up on some manuscript stuff. 

Thursday, March 11, 2010

ARE YOU A RESPONDER?

(I think this is the iguana I touched!)

Are you a responder? Do you respond to every comment on your blog? I’m curious, especially after reading Greg’s post on The Happy Accident.

I try to respond to each commenter. I usually have between five and twenty-five comments a day, so it’s not too hard to be personal. I want you (the reader) to know I appreciate that you enjoyed my words enough to leave a comment.

What happens when you have 700 followers like the ladies over at Shooting Star? Could you respond to all of their comments each day? They amaze me! They still are able to make personal comments. Suzette sent me a facebook message this week about my puppy, and she's a virtual friend...

Can blogging get in the way of writing?

I consider every post a writing exercise. What about you?

Do you like sharing little bits about yourself? (You don’t have to answer that question…) I shared a lot yesterday and it was fun.

I’D LOVE TO HEAR YOUR THOUGHTS…

Wednesday, March 10, 2010

TRUTHS REVEALED, AWARDS TO BE GIVEN AND AN UPDATE...

My truths revealed…


1. I was born in England in 1963. I lived in a house with no toilet or bathtub. We only had water in the kitchen sink. The only untruth here is I wasn’t born in 1963.

2. I moved to America when I was 10. I moved to North Dakota and was super excited because the toilet was inside the house! Not true...I moved to the U.S. when I was 8. I moved to Iowa first, then Arkansas, then Missouri and now I’m in Iowa again. Ironically, I’m about an hour from where I moved to when I first came to the States.

3. I married my high school sweetheart. We dated for two years, got married and had a baby right away. The only truth in here is that I dated my husband for two years. We waited for ten years to have a baby. She’s fourteen today!

4. I was a disc jockey on a local radio station in college. I interviewed former President Bill Clinton and Miss USA, Terry Utley. This is so close to being true, but I didn’t interview President Clinton.

5. I've met Bill Clinton, Dale Bumpers, Sam and Helen Walton and J.B. Hunt. Helen Walton told me that if your husband didn't see you eat cake, the calories didn't count and J.B. told my husband he married above his head. The truth is revealed…This is all true!

6. I once ate 3 Mc Rib sandwiches and a large order of fries. (Ah, to be young again...) Not...I ate two Mc Rib’s and a large order of fires at McDonalds.

7. When I was in Costa Rica (last year) I touched an alligator. Close, but not quite true.  I touched an iguana in Costa Rica. They have crocodiles there, not alligators. I did go on the Rio Tarcoles and saw loads of crocodiles.

So now I’d like to pass on these two awards:

I’d like to pass the Creative Writer Award to Jill, Karen Hooper, D.L., and Shelley (just bought one of her books). I look forward to reading their 6 untruths and one truth. This is a fun writing activity. I had no idea it was that easy for me to lie!


I’m passing The Silver Lining Award to Casey (for linking my interview with her informative blog), Buffy (who is always encouraging me) and Old Kitty (who is such a sweet person and a fellow Brit).

Thanks for all the kind notes about Macy yesterday. She’s still not herself, but she seems a bit better. We (Awesome Vet and me) think it was a reaction to the shot she had yesterday.

If you haven't been to Literary Agent Kathleen Ortizzle's blog, hop over and check it out.  She has a great post on query etiquette today and holds quite a few contests. (Kathleen held the query contest with agent Joanna Stampfel-Volpe.)

Have a great evening! I’ll be taking my daughter out to celebrate the fourteenth birthday tonight.

Tuesday, March 9, 2010

ONE SICK PUPPY!

I have to put off tonight’s post...Our puppy, Macy, had some sort of allergic reaction to something today. Our awesome vet zoomed over to the house, whisked her away and filled her up with medication. I was sick to my stomach. I thought she was having a heart attack! She went rigid and began drooling. She couldn't move. It was seriously scary! Her face began swelling...Our awesome vet filled her up with medicine, observed her for a few hours and then brought her home. He said we could call him during the night if we needed to. What a great guy! She's pretty lethargic, but she looks okay. She's curled up on her big pillow.




I'll post my truths and pass along the awards tomorrow...

Monday, March 8, 2010

Exceptional Contest, Cool Awards and a Bodybugg...

My dear friend, Susan (pictured here with author Peter Jacobi), and I got to spend some little  quality time together this weekend.   (Me...full of smiles)  We talked about books, agents, submissions and blogs.  We even played games  (Susan and Sharon with big smiles...husbands...not so much).  If you haven't checked Susan out, please do.              

To my surprise, Susan presented me with a Creative Writer Award last month.   I've been directed to tell six untruths and one truth, so here I go...

  1. I was born in England in 1963.  I lived in a house with no toilet or bathtub.  We only had water in the kitchen sink.

  2. I moved to America when I was 10.  I moved to North Dakota and was super excited because the toilet was inside the house!

  3. I married my high school sweetheart.  We dated for two years, got married and had a baby right away.

  4. I was a disc jockey on a local radio station in college.  I interviewed former President Bill Clinton and Miss USA, Terry Utley.

  5. I've met Bill Clinton, Dale Bumpers, Sam and Helen Walton and J.B. Hunt.  Helen Walton told me that if your husband didn't see you eat cake, the calories didn't count and J.B. told my husband he married above his head.

  6. I once ate 3 Mc Rib sandwiches and a large order of fries.  (Ah, to be young again...)

  7. When I was in Costa Rica (last year) I touched an alligator. 
HMMM....Which one is true?  (The big reveal and pass the award along is  tomorrow.)

The lovely ladies, Bethany and Suzette, at Shoot Star awarded me the Silver Lining award for venturing into the 21st Century.  I did a two part Skype interview with literary agent Mark McVeigh.  Bethany and Suzette are having an AWESOME CONTEST!!!  Suzette's agent is giving away a 40 page critique!!!!  So hop over and fill out their easy form.  Good luck everyone!


How many of you are numbers people...detail orientated...  I bought a Bodybugg today.  I spent a huge chunk of the day on the computer figuring it out (hopefully).   I'm looking forward to checking it at the end of each day to see if I had a calorie deficit.  I can't wait to add another column to my workout spread sheet. Does anyone have a bodybugg?  Have you had any success with it? 

Thursday, March 4, 2010

QUERY KNOWLEDGE QUEST...

The truth is; we all want (at least) one of these to be ours. Query letters to agents, editors, and publishers are the means to our desired end. So how can we make our query letters catch someone’s eye. First, we have to look at the rejections we have received and ourselves some serious questions:

Check out the links to my Wadmates, Susan and Amy’s blogs for what they have learned about queries in the past week.

My analysis of my (query) entry in Joanna Stampfel-Volpe’s contest follows each question…

 Did I target right person to submit it to? No, I treated this like it was a contest.
• Did I do enough research? Answered…I should have known what she was looking for.
Did I critique my query like it was a manuscript? Did I check for adverbs, that's, be verbs…Umm, well you can see I didn’t.
• Did I study interviews of the recipient and found out his or her likes and dislikes in a query? Answered.
Am I aware of what is going on in the market? Thanks to a Skype interview with Agent Mark McVeigh, I feel aware of what is going on in the market. That was why I didn’t query a folktale or a picture book manuscript. Link one and two will get you to my interview with Mark.



 Was it the best letter it could be? At that moment, I thought it was. In retrospect, I should have considered who I was sending it to. I was thinking about using the book in the classroom, not how am I going to hook her and get her to want to read the manuscript.
• Did I have a hook? I thought I did, but not so much…I was thinking of how I would use it as a teacher.
• Did I ramble? I don’t think so.
• Did I keep it under 300 words? Yes.
• Did I follow their guidelines? Yes. I reread the rules of the contest before I hit send.
• Was it tailored to their taste? No, foolishly, I considered this a contest rather than a query letter.



On Sat, Feb 27, 2010 at 12:01 PM

Dear Ms. Stampfel-Volpe,

I appreciate the opportunity enter your Query Contest –I can handle the truth.

BORROW, BEG AND EARN is a beginning chapter book that reflects our society’s current obsession with living beyond our means at any. It incorporates math and personal responsibility on the level that would be appropriate for a second or third grader.  (See what I mean about how I would use it in the classroom...)

8 (Should I have spelled out his age?) year old David desperately (adverb) wants a pair of Ninja Heelys. The problem is; he’ll have to save the money for them. David thinks this will be impossible, but Mom’s willing to pay him for doing chores. The first day of vacation arrives and he borrows money from three people. David gets into a cycle of borrowing and spending. When he hits rock bottom, his family and friends seem to pull away from him. By the end of the summer David has figured out how to live within his means, pay everyone back, reclaim his best friend, buy the Ninja Heelys, and learned to save.  (Did I ramble? Characters? Plot? Resolution?)

I have a B.S. in Elementary Education and taught elementary school for seventeen years. I am a SCBWI member and a Highlights Foundation Summer Workshop at Chautauqua alumni. (Didn't include my magazine publication ecause it wasn't relevant to submission.)

Thank you for your time (Thanks in advance...) and consideration. I look forward to hearing from you.

Sincerely,
Sharon Mayhew
http://skmayhew.blogspot.com/  (Showed a little of my platform, in case she was interested.)


Dear Sharon,

I don't really fall in love with the pushing-the-moral type chapter books.

Pass for me, but thanks for participating,

J

Joanna Stampfel-Volpe
Agent
Nancy Coffey Literary & Media Representation



WHAT HAVE YOU LEARNED FROM YOUR REJECTIONS? Please share…

Wednesday, March 3, 2010

TO TRUST OR NOT TO TRUST...

“Crocodile,” he called. “I have a treat for you.”

Crocodile swam over and smiled. Spider Monkey will make a delicious lunch.

“You have a treat for me.” Crocodile smiled.

“I discovered a new animal. There are so many, they’ve become pests. I thought you might like to try some.” Spider Monkey's eyes twinkled.

“Bring them a little closer,” said Crocodile.

“This is as close as I can get,” replied Spider Monkey.

“Don’t worry about falling in. I’ll carry you ashore if you fall.” Crocodile’s eyes sparkled.

WHO DO YOU TRUST?  WHO DO YOU AUTOMATICALLY BELIEVE?  WHO ARE YOU A YES MAN TO?

Tuesday, March 2, 2010

WHAT'S BUGGING YOU?

What's bugging you? 

I'll tell you what's bugging me...SNOW.  I've had enough.  I'm ready for spring! 

Monday, March 1, 2010

WIP IT, WHIP IT GOOD...It's Manuscript Monday!

I don't know about you, but I needed some spring this weekend.  So I went to the florist and bought some. 

Thusday, Tess, shared a snippet of her upcoming book, WITH A NAME LIKE LOVE.  Tess, being Tess encouraged all of us to share a snippet of something we are working on.  Friday Amy shared a snippet of her WIP.  So today, I'm going to share a snippet of my mid-grade historical fiction WIP.



WHRRRRR, whrrr, WHRRR, whrrr


The air raid siren howled. It was September 7th, 1940 and the Blitz had begun.

“Hurry, hurry!” Mummy shouted. “Get out of bed, girls. Get to the shelter!”

Our shelter was in back of our council house. Daddy us dug a deep trench, in the back garden where we used to grow potatoes, and covered it with corrugated aluminium. The walls and floor were cold and damp and I hated going in it.

“I don’t want to go in there, Daddy,” Gina whined. “It’s full of creepy crawlies.”

“It-will-be-fine,” Daddy’s face was drawn in tight. In the distance we could hear the whistle of the bombs and the thunderous sound of explosions as they landed.

“Down there, now!” roared Daddy. All the while the sirens continued to blast on and off.

WHRRRRR, whrrr, WHRRR, whrrr

Mummy slid down the dirt wall into the shelter and I followed her lead. Gina was clutching Dolly. Daddy lowered her to Mummy. We got down on our knees, put our heads on our laps and covered our ears with our hands. Gina began crying. Mummy pulled us both close to her and she patted our backs.

“It’ll be all right, girls, it’ll be all right,” she said.

Daddy leapt into the shelter and dragged the corrugated aluminium over the opening above our heads.

KABOOM! KABOOM! KABOOM!

EEEAAWWW! EEEAAWWW!

The explosions and wailing sirens continued through the night. We could see, ever so slightly, around the sides of the roof that the sky was continually changing from dark to light and back. As dawn broke we could hear the German bombers flying off. The earth stopped shaking and the air raid siren blew on solid blast for two minutes. The air raid was over, Mr. Churchill told us (on the wireless) that would be the all clear signal.

Daddy pushed our make do roof out of the way. We all stood up and tried to rub the dirt off our legs. Gina began to cough. A thick layer of dust made the air brown.

Daddy climbed out first. “Gimme a sec and I’ll clear the way.”

We heard a loud thud as Daddy threw something and it bounced across our back garden. “Pass Gina to me. Go slow. It’s a bloomin mess up ere.”

Mummy picked up Gina and Daddy pulled her out of the shelter.

“Stand right there, Luv, and don’t move,” Daddy said. “Joyce, you’re next!”

I climbed on top of an old wooden crate that had been put in the corner of the shelter and Daddy helped me to get out.

“Jus' stand with Gina, Joyce. Let me ‘elp yur Mum.” Daddy took Mummy’s hands and pulled her out of the shelter. I loved the way Daddy held Mummy’s hand. Even in all of this, I could see how gently he took it. It was like she was a delicate Wedgewood tea cup.

Gina and I stood frozen in the spot Daddy put us in. It was hard to see. The air was thick with smoke and dust.

Mrs. Haskell’s house was half gone. Did they make it to their shelter? I wondered. The half that was still standing was attached to our house. Amazingly enough, our house seemed to only have broken windows.

Mister and Mrs. Elstone’s house was completely gone. Stone, brick, metal, and dust mixed in with our neighbor’s possessions lay on what had been the streets and gardens around our house.

Daddy began to force his way through the rubble. “Come ‘elp me, Janet. I can ‘ear Mrs. Haskell an’ ‘er boys. They’re under all this rubbish.”

“Girls,” Mummy said, “You mustn’t move from this spot.”

We both nodded. Gina squeezed my hand tightly.

Mummy navigated her way over to the Haskell’s air raid shelter.

“We can hear you, Mary. Are you and the boys alright? Wilfred and I’ll get you out,” Mummy called out.

“We’re bloody filthy and tired, but we’re alright.” Mrs. Haskell’s voice sounded muffled from under her make-do-shelter roof. She kept coughing. It sounded as if she was about to cough up her guts.

Daddy pulled up Bill and Alexander. They were filthy, just like their mum said. Mummy helped Daddy pull up Mrs. Haskell.

We all stood together, holding hands; filthy and silent.

The lighter it got the worse it appeared. Almost every house on our side of the road was damaged. People were emerging from their shelters. First they shook the dust from their hair and brushed off their clothes, and then they stood in awe of what had happened. The smaller children began crying. The older boys and girls put their arms around them. The grownups began searching through the rubble in the hopes of finding their friends and neighbors.

I left Gina, standing with Dolly, by our shelter. I wanted to help too. I wandered down the back row, not too far. I could still see Mummy and Daddy when I found Mr. Elstone. He was lying very still at the bottom of his shelter. Brick and glass lay all around him. The roof from his shelter was nowhere to be seen. “Mr. Elstone, Mr. Elstone,” I shouted. He did not move. Perhaps he was scared of getting injured by the broken glass, I thought. “Mummy, Daddy,” I called out. “I’ve found Mr. Elstone. I think he’s hurt.”

Daddy rushed to me. We stood together looking down at Mr. Elstone. “Do you see that?” I pointed to a shard of glass poking out of Mr. Elstone’s side.

“Get the little uns out of here, Janet!”


Sorry it was so a little longer than a snippet...Anything you like? Dislike? (This is my first attempt at writing anything over about 7,000 words.) Suggestions? Advice?